It was cold, bitterly cold. Fen wrapped his cloak tighter
around his shoulders. The sun had disappeared over the horizon, but the last
glow of dusk still lay over the trees. He reached into his bag and pulled out a
small toothpick and gripped it tightly in his fist. He spoke ever so gently into the hole made by
his fingers and then opened his palm. A small flame jumped from his hand on to
the ground and continued to burn. Fen waved his hand over the flame drawing it up
until it floated above the ground on an invisible candlestick. He did this six
times and carefully placed each flame to create a wide circle in the center of
the field. It was time to begin.
In his mind’s eye he could see Maite and the baby. It was
due any day now and time was running out. After the birth they would have only
6 months together, and then what? Would he ever see her again, ever see his
child? According to the law, their union could not last. They had been joined
by the Council to create and reproduce a child who would be skilled in the
Wordspeech. Once this had been accomplished, the child was given permanently to
the Speechmothers and Fen and Maite would join the other Wordworkers or be
given a new union. But, Fen knew of another law.
This law stated that if a Wordworker were to complete the
Construction Verse and build a home for his mate and their child, they would
never be separated. This had been done only a few times that he knew of and the
men who had accomplished it were all leaders of the Council. The verse was
all but impossible to complete. It was long and complicated with verses for
protection, peace and safety all woven in. It had to be done between the hours
of dusk and dawn and you were not allowed to take anything with you. Everything
that you used had to come from the earth, the stones, and the trees and it had
to be completed before the child was born. He thought back to the day that he
had first asked Maite if he could build her a home. She had simply smiled and
said, “I knew you would.”
So he had begun to study, to watch, to ask, to listen. For
nine months he immersed himself in learning the Construction Verse. He wanted
to know how it worked, why some had been able to complete it and others not.
Everything had led to this night alone on this hill and he was ready.
He worked all night with just the tiny Wordflames to guide
him. It was hard work but with each part of the verse, the earth had given up
its resources. The yellow sandstone for the foundation and walls had pushed up
from the grassy slope, the trees had kneeled down and shed their remaining
autumn leaves for the roof. He had watched as little swallows had carried tiny
bits of clay and worked to fill in the gaps between the stones. Even the ants
had worked all night carrying away the excess dirt.
When he was finished, he sat down on the hill and saw for
the first time the house that he had worked so hard for. It was small, but it
was enough, and more importantly, just as the sun was peeking up over the
horizon, it was done. He breathed a sigh of relief and wiped a tear off his
cheek. He spoke a word and watched as the Wordflames slowly flickered and then
disappeared. He heard a rustling in the bushes behind him and turned expecting
to see Maite, but it wasn’t Maite.
“Well done, Fen.” It was Anid, one of the highest leaders of
the Council. “It has been a long time since anyone has completed the
Construction Verse.”
“I know, you were the last, were you not?” Fen looked into
the eyes of the old man.
“Yes, and to see you complete this tonight gives me great joy.
I had thought that the secret had been lost and that there would be no more
young men willing to do what you have done. There is something about the heart
of a man that would drive him to work this hard for a woman he has known for
only a short time and a child he has not yet seen. Many have failed trying to
do what you have done.”
“Yes, I know why they failed.” Fen picked up his little bag
and put it back on his shoulder. “They wanted to build the house to prove their
worth to the Council, to become one of the high leaders. They did not work for
the right reasons.”
“What is that reason, Fen?” Anid was leaning hard on his
staff and staring directly into Fen’s eyes.
“Love, Anid, the right reason is love. And I finally
realized as I was studying that everyone else had failed because they did not
know that along with the verses for protection, safety, prosperity, and peace
one had to include love.”
Anid placed his hand on Fen’s shoulder. “Never forget that
my son.”
LOVE this. Did you write it, Marcie?
ReplyDeleteAh yes love... more importantly love of someone else not of self.
ReplyDeleteIncredibly written. Such a short space, and such a lot in it... <3
ReplyDeleteI really love this, it's beautiful.
ReplyDeleteOh my word! I have chills, Miss Marcie! Your short story is superb and should be turned into a novel. I can feel the love and the determination of your character Fen. I want to know more! I want to meet this Maite that inspires such devotion and this young babe that will come to make a difference in this world you have created. So beautiful! Thank you for sharing! Enjoy the day. Erin
ReplyDeletewhat a beautiful story! I want to read more!
ReplyDeleteLove this...thank you for sharing! Would love to read more!
ReplyDeleteYou are so talented! And definately should write more.
ReplyDeleteI must admit I was very confused when I first saw this posted on your blog. I knew you could write, but this is incredible Marcie!!! While I was reading, I kept asking myself, what novel is this an excerpt from??? I want to buy it and start reading whatever this is. When I didn't see any credit given to any publication, I was very confused. Did she really write this herself??? WOW, Marcie, wow. Please continue your amazing storytelling and writing. This is amazing!!!
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